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"The Ballad of Angus McGee (poem)" by Larry N. Morris

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I don’t do poetry but this idea came to me when I was very bored on a long flight from Vancouver to Chicago. Just thought I’d have some fun with it.
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The Ballad of Angus McGee

by Dirk Ceruse

The maiden’s sighs were a song on the land

when Angus McGee strode past.

In his kilt and his tam, and with claymore in hand

he caused all their hearts to beat fast.

 

But Angus McGee was a leader of men,

of the warriors who guarded the clan.

He cared naught for the hearts he could win,

he was charged with protecting their land.

 

Tall and strong and bold was he,

a mighty warrior it’s told.

And in battle a terrible sight to see,

but the lands of the clan he did hold.

 

Then Angus McGee was told one day

of a blight upon the land.

Of a swarm of demons coming his way

so he called together his band.

 

Up to a pass in the hills they ran

and there they would meet this threat.

The dark tide had wasted a neighboring clan

but they hadn’t faced Angus yet.

 

Hundreds was the demons’ sum

where Angus McGee stood fast.

But only three abreast could they come

in the narrowness of the pass.

 

The slaughter was great or so it’s been said,

blood soaking into the ground.

And Angus McGee found his greatest dread

when he took a look around.

 

All his fellows lay slain and the hoard pressed hard,

still Angus McGee held the way.

Covered with wounds he kept up his guard

but his blood was flowing away.

 

At last the demons resigned and withdrew

and Angus McGee swelled with pride.

His clan’s lands were safe, that much he knew,

so he smiled, then he laughed ‘fore he died.

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13 Sep 200545 Hazel
Ach aye! yer scottish ballad is aye bonnie! ye shud congratulate yersel fur bein sa glaiket wi yer peadie wee poem! Yer a braw fella love hazel frae bonnie scotland where the hills be full o' heather and aye covered wi' snaw! xxx*lol* Very good, very good. Thanks for the great comment. *walks away wondering who the devil Hazel is*
14 Sep 2005:-) Catherine Smith
Well it's very stereotyped aint it? If I suppress my inner Scot for a bit I can tell you that it is quite a good poem and it flows well and I really like the ending, it seemed very realistic. However I have to let my Scottishness out just a tad. This lacks the feeling of a true Scottish story. I guessed you to be from America before I checked and I agree with Emma that it's got that Hollywood-Braveheart feel which isn't bad but it's a tad cheesy, more so if you are actually Scottish. I laughed when I read his name and half expected a funny poem which I don't think was your intent but that might just be me. My last little nitpick is I don't think McGee is a Highland name, I cannot picture a strong clansman called McGee. And with that I'll stop and congratulate you for writing a poem since I could never do that and it's a good idea.Thank you for your input, it all adds up.
20 Oct 2005:-) Tasia MacKay
Wow! This is excellent! You should change it to "Angus MacKay" (Thank you very much, Tasia. (I knew how to pronunce Mac Kay, Mac Giever is prononuced Ma Hi'er.) I'm glad you are enjoying my work.
10 Nov 2005:-) Dan Shevock
This is my favorite of your poems that I've read here, so I thought it might be nice to tell you that. 2 lovely rhythm, and rhyme, but beyond all that, it was moving. Very emotional. (a tear came to my eye on the last word) How spartan.Thanks Dan. This is my favorite too. Spartan indeed, Angus was ready to make the ultimate sacrifice.
20 Nov 2005:-) Matthew J. Hillary
wow... the end seemed a bit light-hearted for him dieing =P It was kind of beowulfish, though to tell the truth... I merely skimmed through that and relied heavily on my teacher lecturing on it to pass the tests, but from what I heard of beowulf, laughing when you realize you're dead sounds like a him thing to do.

Anyways, your poems are cool, and you do really well to tell the story through them without being boring, or too forcefull. I could hardly imagine the hack job I would do if I tried telling a story through a rhyme scheme.

I think I like this one most so far.

Take care and uhh... rock on or something 12Thanks for the comment. You might be surprised if you just sit down and give it a shot. That's how I started doing poetry.
17 Dec 200545 Tom 'Malerbron' Vickers
So sad, yet i feel that Angus has certainly been reserved a place in Valhalla, that this is not the end of his labors or his enjoyment of them.A touching thought, Tom. I feel you are correct. Thanks for visiting and commenting.
23 Jan 2006:-) Rhiannon Swain
Wow! Not only is Angus McGee an awesome name, but he's got a CLAYMORE... sweeeeeeeeet.

Loved this short poem as it was straightforward and not at all tedious with a slightly surprise ending - and a fitting one, at that, too!

Plus kilt dudes are just uber cool, anyway. ^_~

The only thing I thought could use a bit of work, however, was the meter. There wasn't a real set one at all. At first I thought it was dactyllic, but then, it was iambic and then trochaic and then it just went all over the place. A poem can always be made better by using proper meter.... just a suggestion.

-EmilyThanks for commenting, I'm glad you liked it. You've lost me with all those catagories of poetry. I have had no training in poetry and know little about it. (But, I do know what a limerick is, heh.) I just had fun writing this and have had a very good reaction to it. For that, I am delighted.
28 Feb 200645 Becky
Well it's truly original... to me it's got a sad humor to it. Very nice piece =)Thank you for visiting and for commenting. Come back soon.
1 Mar 2006:-) Christopher Heisserer
Solid rhyme scheme. A great work. I thoroughly enjoyed it, and since I'm not generally a fan of poetry, it's a good thing. I know this is a coincidence, but MacGyver's first name is Angus. So seldom do I see that name used. It's fitting, for certain. ~xThanks Chris, glad you like it. There in an old and well known poem called "The Cremation of Sam McGee" He was a prospector in Alaska (or Yukon?) who died from the winter weather. If you can find it on the internet, it's an entertaining read.
30 Mar 2006:-) Stephanie Rennolds
^______^ I told I would come read.. eventually!

How can you do anything other than rip my poem to shreds? This has wonderful rhymes and wonderful beats to it, and a lovely story line. ^_^ Very nicely done.Thank you, Steph, glad you like it. I'm not sure this is my best, but it is still my favorite. Heh....
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 • Keywords: Poem, Celt, Warriors, Hero, Clans
 • Categories: Demons, Imps, Devils, Beholders..., Fights, Duels, Battles, Orc, Goblins, Trolls, Trollocs..., Romance, Emotion, Love, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins, Celtic, Parody
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